Black-Eyed Susan

Frozen Blackeyed Susan

Frozen Black-eyed Susans in the snow after blizzard of Oct 30, 2011

Several years ago I noticed the Black- Eyed Susans every time I turned around.  All summer and through the fall they were everywhere.  I went out of town for a week and on my return I didn’t see a single one.  I wrote an orchestrated “Art Song” about the disappearing flowers.

Note – I do not have the voice for this type of music.  This is just a demo.

Everywhere I go
You greet me
Staring
With your flame-rimmed eye
A little sun
Come to warm me
All summer,
Cares washed away

I look for you
This morning
I look for you
In ice-rimmed leaves
I look for you
Round fields and houses
I look for you
In vain

By the path
A patch of brown
Memories
Of summer heat
I see
Your burnt-out core
The fire’s gone
From your eye

Everywhere I’d go
You’d greet me
Staring
With your flame-rimmed eye
Your little sun
No longer warms me
Fall has come
Winter, nigh

Note – the music player often doesn’t show up in the viewer.  Please view the original.

10 thoughts on “Black-Eyed Susan

  1. Pingback: New Music – Flashback Now | Trent's World (the Blog)

  2. M-R

    In my untutored opinion, this is simply a poem and an accompanying piece of music. If you were to read the poem and then play the music, your message would be there, in its entirety.
    On the other hand, there is something of “The Lithuanian Knotting Song” here; so I’m probably talking garbage … I so often do.
    :-|

    Liked by 1 person

    Reply
    1. trentpmcd Post author

      Well I asked… No, actually you’re not too far from what I’m trying to achieve. Maybe. The idea is for the music to paint a picture of whatever the poem is about. It can be a literal picture, which would put it closer to impressionism, or it could be an inner, emotional picture, which would tend towards expressionism. Whichever way, the music is supposed to create a soundtrack to the words, describing them and, hopefully, enhancing them. Of course if I had a real singer who could add emotion to the words instead of just trying his hardest to hit the right notes at the right time maybe you’d find it more successful in reaching those goals.

      Liked by 1 person

      Reply
      1. M-R

        You are no hopeless caroller !
        No; it’s just that I prefer the two separate, and I reckon they are identifiably twins.
        Of course, when blogging and asking for input, one is sentencing oneself to myriad opinions.
        :)

        Liked by 1 person

        Reply
  3. Pingback: Waiting for Spring | Trent's World (the Blog)

  4. Angela

    Trent, this is beautiful! You have exactly the kind of voice for this type of music, what you don’t seem to have is the self confidence. In your mixing you are allowing the instrumentals to over power your voice track. In the parts where you’re vocals are pull back on the instrumentation there, let your voice be heard.

    Liked by 1 person

    Reply

Express Yourself

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s