Pealing Back the Years – #Haibun #Senryu

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Pealing back the Years

I am walking through the village, fighting a cold wind.  Random flakes are stinging my face.  What’s that?  Ah, it’s the clarion sounds from the church reverberating through the town.  A chill goes down my spine as I remember the sounds of yesteryear and for the moment I am that child once again, out in the cold to pass time as I anxiously await the holiday.  The warmth of the special day glows inside.  The excitement is building, until that last echo tolls off of the distant hills.  It is quiet again, and I walk on in the too chilly present.

I hear them ringing
Sound from a distant tower
Chimes of bygone years

No, that title is not a typo ;)  This was written for Colleen’s Weekly Poetry Challenge.  The key words today were “Bells” and “Past”.  Following her suggestion, I didn’t use the words, I used only synonyms.  In the past I would call the poem part a “Haiku”, but I’m not sure, so I called it a “Senryu”.  I may be wrong….

 

18 thoughts on “Pealing Back the Years – #Haibun #Senryu

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  2. Colleen Chesebro

    Well done, Trent. Yes, according to the rules this is a Senryu. Haiku should deal with nature and Senryu covers everything else. I lived in that holiday Haibun with you. Excellent! <3

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      The only question I had about Senryu was “irony”. I think about 90% of what I called “Haiku” in the past was really “Senru, and some of it had a lot of irony ;)

      Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it.

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      1. Colleen Chesebro

        Yes, I believe you’re right. Some of the best Haiku books I’ve read are really filled with Senryu. I wanted you guys to know the difference. Especially, if you are going to submit for poetry competitions, etc. <3

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