Pealing back the Years
I am walking through the village, fighting a cold wind. Random flakes are stinging my face. What’s that? Ah, it’s the clarion sounds from the church reverberating through the town. A chill goes down my spine as I remember the sounds of yesteryear and for the moment I am that child once again, out in the cold to pass time as I anxiously await the holiday. The warmth of the special day glows inside. The excitement is building, until that last echo tolls off of the distant hills. It is quiet again, and I walk on in the too chilly present.
I hear them ringing
Sound from a distant tower
Chimes of bygone years
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No, that title is not a typo ;) This was written for Colleen’s Weekly Poetry Challenge. The key words today were “Bells” and “Past”. Following her suggestion, I didn’t use the words, I used only synonyms. In the past I would call the poem part a “Haiku”, but I’m not sure, so I called it a “Senryu”. I may be wrong….
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Uhm, talking of typos … shouldn’t ”random flakes are stinking my face” be ‘…stinging …’
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No, no, my face is stinking… hmmm. I missed that one. Thanks!
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Just corrected it.
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Merry Xmas.
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:)
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Reblogged this on Frank J. Tassone and commented:
#Haiku Happenings #6: Trent’s latest #haibun for Colleen’s Weekly Poetry Challenge!
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Well done, Trent. Yes, according to the rules this is a Senryu. Haiku should deal with nature and Senryu covers everything else. I lived in that holiday Haibun with you. Excellent! <3
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The only question I had about Senryu was “irony”. I think about 90% of what I called “Haiku” in the past was really “Senru, and some of it had a lot of irony ;)
Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it.
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Yes, I believe you’re right. Some of the best Haiku books I’ve read are really filled with Senryu. I wanted you guys to know the difference. Especially, if you are going to submit for poetry competitions, etc. <3
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Whatever it is, the poem is beautiful. Lovely mood piece to stir up the magic of Christmas.
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Sometimes the littlest things bring back those magical memories. Thanks.
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Definitely at this time of year. :-)
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Yes.
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Love your haibun, Trent. “Too chilly present” reverberated in my present moment in many ways. Beautifully written. :)
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My present moment too, at least physically – we are in the middle a winter storm. The snow is giving way to sleet and rain….
Thanks :)
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Same here in Northern Ontario. Our first major snow storm. Sleet and rain don’t sound good.
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I have about 4 or 5 inches (10 or 12 cm) of wet, heavy, crusty snow to remove this evening… We had a little over the weekend, so nothing major so far, just messy.
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