I’m looking for Beta-Readers for the Halley Branch. You may have actually read this book! Yes, I originally posted this as a serialized novel a few years back. But it has changed a bit since then. Mostly some details have been filled in, characters made “real” and that type of stuff to make a bunch of blog posts become an actually book.
The book is a bit of a ghost story with “magic” and strange philosophy. Paranormal? I think of it as some place between contemporary fantasy and horror, perhaps closer to horror. Not copying Stephen King, but in that vicinity. I am posting the blurb at the bottom of the page. The book is about 100K words. There is some (not much) “bad” language and a few “adult situations”, though nothing in any graphic detail (if you make it past the first chapter, you are set). Maybe one or two disturbing scenes, though these were posted on the blog without any complaints (as was most of the more sexual parts).
Where We Are
I finished the fourth draft of this two months ago. Last week I read through it and made some minor tweaks. After I get feedback I will do at least one more revision, perhaps a draft if called for. After that it will go into editing mode, correcting all of those pesky mistakes that always show up.
If you read it when it was posted and liked it, this may be for you. If you like horror and contemporary fantasy, then you might like this. If you hate, hate horror, don’t want to read a book about ghosts or magic, don’t want to read about what might be described as a family cult, then you should pass…. Another question, do you have time to read this?
What I’m looking for
Do you like it? Are there any issues? Does something stick out like a sore thumb? At this point I am not looking for fine details (wrong words, grammar), though if something bugs you, go ahead and let me know. No, what I am looking for are issues with the story. Not enough detail? Too much? Let me know.
Are you interested? If you already have my email (not the one the blog is typed to, my real email address), you can drop me a note. If not, let me know in the comments. If you feel comfortable putting in your address (you might use “at” and “dot” instead of “@” and “.” so bots don’t pick it up), leave it there. I will delete it once I have read it. If you don’t feel comfortable leaving it there, well, we can work out a way :) Just let me know in the comments.
I would like to get responses back by May 11 if possible. This will give me time to work on any changes I need to make before having it edited. If you know you won’t be able to touch it for more than four weeks, well, you may want to skip this :) If you do participate but find that you can’t complete it by May 11, I think I’m a reasonable person, so we’ll talk about it.
An evil 300 years in the making. A trap set 150 years in the past.
The day should have been a normal “family day” at the Hawkins’ Mausoleum, but a premonition followed Trevor into the crypt. To make matters worse, he couldn’t shake his morning vision of dead woman draped in a funeral-shroud.
After rescuing a girl trapped in the tomb, repressed memories forced him to reevaluate everything. Was his extended family a cult with roots going back to America’s colonial past? Was the evil Benjamin Halley still stalking his tomb after 150 years? Was there any truth to the Power described by the family’s patriarch, Miles Hawkins?
Trevor realized that he was being manipulated and drawn into a trap set in the 19th century, and feared that everyone around him had already been ensnared. Who could he trust? The members of his own family’s Branch, The Bradford’s, like his cousins Bill or Stan? Perhaps members of the Hawkins Branch, such as the beautiful but jaded Amelie? The one Branch he knew not to trust was the extinct Halley Branch.
But the Halley’s were the ones who were welcoming him with open, if dead, arms.