So blue and cranky
Some cold in the summer heat
Miss your joyous face
A gloomy forecast
Skies a melancholy grey
Hope for upbeat news
There is a change in the weather of my soul. A high pressure is replaced by a low. The outlook is a bit pessimistic, but with your sun away, what can I say, I’m feeling down. Can I hope for a new front that’s a bit more upbeat? Will your merry eyes and joyous smile once more show up on my RADAR? I hope to dance in the rain in delight, when that rainbow that’s you is back in sight.
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This was written for Colleen’s Weekly Poetry Challenge. The key words today were “Happy” and “Morose”. Following her suggestion, I didn’t use the words, I used only synonyms. i was super busy and missed last week.
More love poems to nobody ;) I think the two top ones can be called Senryu, but I don’t know if there is really irony present. Adding that paragraph does get them closer to a Haibun though. I hope ;)
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Hi, Trent! Great haibun and senrya. I’m definitely affected by the weather. Gorgeous pictures! I hope you feel better soon. :)
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Thanks Vashti! I think everyone is affected by the weather this summer! Both of the photos are from my cottage on Cape Cod – it is a beautiful place! I’m doing very well now, but thinking of weather, I will feel better in the fall, when it is cool and not as humid ;)
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I can relate with you about the fall. I love fall weather. I’ve always wanted to visit Cape Cod. I’ve always heard hoe beautiful it is. I’m glad you’re feeling better. :)
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Thanks.
It is very pretty here, and, in opinion, doubly so in the fall – not only is it still pretty, but all of the tourists go home ;)
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Ha, ha! Sorry for the typo *how. :/ I will make it a point to visit. :D
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Really nice – love the two parts of the writing and so emotion packed.
Oh and is there an extra “is” in the last line?
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Thanks! And yes, I guess there are two “is”s. Didn’t notice that before.
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:)
peace
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:)
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Beautiful. The picture is stunning.
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Thanks! This location seems to get some of the most beautiful sunsets I’ve ever seen :)
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And what an elegant, lovely sunset — or sunrise. I’m assuming sunset, but of course, it could be either.
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Yes, sunset over Swan Pond in Dennis Port. I think I take a picture from this vantage every day I’m down there. i need to do a series, like Monet ;)
Thanks
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I like this.
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Thanks IW! I hope you’ve been writing poetry recently :)
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Beautiful and very cleverly written 💜
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Thanks Willow!
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💜💜
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It’s very hot here in southern CA. It’s been in the upper 90s for days. Any upbeat weather coming soon?
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I hope so! I also hope for a lot of rain up north of you!
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I saw some rain clouds atop the mountains north of where we are. But it was just teasing us!
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I love the use of sensory and visual means to depict your feelings – very well done!
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Thanks!
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I too love the use of a weather forecast to describe your mood. Nicely done!
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Thanks Joanne!
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Trent, this is quite a splendid double Senryu Haibun!! I love the analogy of using the weather to display your mood. Very nice!! <3
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Thanks Colleen! Weather and mood often go together, so an easy analogy for me :)
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I like it! My husband has called me a weather witch for years! LOL! Many people are affected by the weather. It must go back to hunter/gatherer times. :D
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Sometimes it seems our moods can control the weather, but… I’m sure you are right that it does go back to a time when we had to be much more in tune with the world around us, such as when we were still hunter gatherers.
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