The Film, #haibun #etheree #doubleetheree

The Film

I look into a rose-tint fog and smile at the dancing shadows. A thin, transparent barrier divides me from this place. I imagine that I step through this wall of celluloid and find you still there, just as you were. I reach out, but grab only mist. You aren’t really here, are you? And neither am I, really. Is it real, or was it at one time? Perhaps that color I see has tainted all. The curtain comes down.

Lights
Camera
Memory
Can it be real?
Was it really me?
And was it really you?
In the movie, you loved me
Your eyes glistened in the close-up
The story unfolded on the screen
Your presence stole every scene you were in
That movie played out in a different world
I memorized the script and action
Or that is how it seemed
Was it a work of fiction
A script written by me
Played out in my mind?
Did you love me?
Memory
The past
Dream

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In ways this is part 2 of last week’s poem.

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Written for Colleen’s Poetry challenge. Each week she gives us two keywords, only we must use synonyms only, not the words themselves. This week the key words were the poet’s (me ;) ) choice, so I chose “Film” (yes, the title) and “Remembered” This week I decided to do a haibun with a double etheree.

16 thoughts on “The Film, #haibun #etheree #doubleetheree”

FineTest May 4, 2019 at 5:21 pm

Kind of cool, and the photo fits so well.

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trentpmcd Post authorMay 4, 2019 at 5:21 pm

Thanks.

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Vashti Q April 10, 2019 at 2:18 pm

Beautiful double Etheree. The imagery and flow are fantastic. I see how it relates to your last poem. :D xo

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trentpmcd Post authorApril 10, 2019 at 2:54 pm

Thanks again, Vashti. In ways, of all of the “syllable” poetry I’ve played with, I think I like what I can do with the double etheree the most.

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1. Vashti Q April 10, 2019 at 4:58 pm
  
  It’s beginning to grow on me too.
  
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  1. trentpmcd Post authorApril 10, 2019 at 5:58 pm
    
    There is something about it – you can play with intensity or make it breath, depending on the poem.
    
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    1. Vashti Q April 10, 2019 at 6:13 pm
      
      You’re right. :)
      
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Violet Lentz April 4, 2019 at 6:55 am

Memories do have a way of becoming much grander than the real event. This was very well done Trent.

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trentpmcd Post authorApril 4, 2019 at 7:15 am

Yep, people often build up the past in their minds and sometimes relationships as well. Thanks.

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Prior... April 3, 2019 at 4:17 am

I like the action and color and… the shape of that poem is cool

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trentpmcd Post authorApril 3, 2019 at 7:08 am

Thanks, Y. As to shape, I like the double etheree – 1 – 10 syllables then turns around 10 – 1.

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1. Prior... April 3, 2019 at 5:15 pm
  
  ahhhhhh – nice
  
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