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“One, two, three – what do I see?” My words were slurred. “Four, five, six – stucco instead of bricks.”
Home for Spring Break, I found myself in front of number 456.
I had never seen a person there nor a light on. Ever. Who took care of the flowers? I was about to find out.
I took another sip from the flask before daring the stairs.
I reached the top. The mystery of “Malibu Home in Minnesota” was about to be solved.
Inside seemed normal at first. Out of the windows I could see the suns set over the mountains.
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OK, I get the hint. This is part 2 of my FF story, though I hope it can be read as a standalone as well…
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Word count = 100
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When there are more than one sun setting, one knows something is afoot!
We may not be where we think we are!
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Toto, I don’t think we’re in Kansas any more. Or Minnesota. Or Earth….
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That’s what Imma thinkin’
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A mysterious story on its own!
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It is…. I have decided to try to continue, but slightly different – I rewrote the two FF as a single, more filled out chapter. We’ll have to see where it goes from there.
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That sounds so fun. I love when inspiration hits!
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I often get inspiration from FF and other prompts :)
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The house seemed unusual for a state that sees long winter. Now that you moved up the stairs, how did you get inside the room to see the mountains?
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That question will be answered in another story ;)
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Yay good stuff, there better be a third part!!
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Thanks. No third part yet, but I did rewrite the first two with a bit more depth – if you are interested, it is; https://trentsworldblog.wordpress.com/2019/06/07/out-of-place-chapter-1/
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Just read it, it’s good like a portal or a magic house depending which type of fiction floats your boat, I’d read more if there was more
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Thanks. Ideas are starting to come, so I will most likely keep going. Not sure yet if it will just be a longish short story, a novella or…
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I finally found the second half– good story, and I enjoyed what you’ve done, but I sure would like to read the rest. And By the way, no mountains in Minnesota :)
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“And By the way, no mountains in Minnesota” – That’s the point – no mountains and only one sun in the sky ;) I have started to look at it off line and may make a longer story out of these two parts.
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I see! I hope you do make a longer story :)
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:)
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A portal to another world? Or has he had one too many sips from his flask and is seeing double :-)
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It’s possible he is seeing double, but then, he is also seeing mountains were mountains aren’t, so… Maybe he stumbled into someplace a little different.
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Ohh… Intriguing. Did someone stumble into a portal to a different world? Dimension? Flask-aided double-vision?
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Could be a flask-aided double vision, but then, there aren’t any mountains in northern Minnesota… Maybe someplace a little different.
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It was interesting as a standalone but also as part two. It all begs for continuation! Well done…
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Thanks. I am playing with some ideas of creating a longer story out of these two parts.
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If not normal, is it haunted? :) — Suzanne
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Perhaps haunted, but perhaps something more – I used the word “suns” twice, that is, plural, as there is more than one sun in the sky, so after going in, he is looking out into a different world. maybe ;)
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Hmm…
Intriguing.
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This is intriguing. Suns!
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Not every planet has just one sun ;)
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I can’t understand how you can make these stories with so few words. It’s very cool. An art in itself.
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Thanks :) It is a great exercise to distill the essence of story down to 100 words. I’ve expanded several, including turning one into a 17,000 word novel and another into a 12,000 word novella (both in the book “Embers”), but I’ve thought about doing a book with them still in their 100 word form. It would take 500 of them to fill a short 50,000 word book, so I might need to add some longer (250 word) stories in as well…
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That would be cool to make a book out of 100 word stories!
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I think some people would love the very, very quick reads. It might drive others crazy ;)
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Yes, you’re probably right. Can’t be everyone’s cup of tea 😉
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Good story, Trent.
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Thanks, Isadora. Did you see the first half?
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No I didn’t. Can you guide me there?
Thanks …
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https://trentsworldblog.wordpress.com/2019/06/05/out-of-place/
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FF SF! Very cunning revelation of the conundrum. But can your MC return to his primary world, I wonder?
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I’m thinking that I’m going to have to change “FF” in FF SF from “Friday Fictioneers” to “Flash Fiction” and fill it in a bit more than I can in 100 word segments. It is possible that the “house” is standing gateway….
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Dear Trent,
Well that’s one explanation…aliens. The suns set…like that.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Maybe aliens. Maybe something totally different ;)Of course I was an impressionable youth when I first saw Luke Skywalker watching the two suns set in the best of the Star Wars movies…
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So not our planet even? Or has another sun arrived? More intrigue.
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I’m not quite sure which way I’ll go if i decide to turn it into something a little longer.
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Very nice piece, Trent.
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Thanks, Robbie. Did you see the first half?
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