Watching the Suns Set

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“One, two, three – what do I see?” My words were slurred.  “Four, five, six – stucco instead of bricks.”

Home for Spring Break, I found myself in front of number 456.

I had never seen a person there nor a light on. Ever.  Who took care of the flowers?  I was about to find out.

I took another sip from the flask before daring the stairs.

I reached the top.  The mystery of “Malibu Home in Minnesota” was about to be solved.

Inside seemed normal at first.  Out of the windows I could see the suns set over the mountains.

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OK, I get the hint.  This is part 2 of my FF story, though I hope it can be read as a standalone as well…

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Word count = 100

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46 thoughts on “Watching the Suns Set”

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      It is…. I have decided to try to continue, but slightly different – I rewrote the two FF as a single, more filled out chapter. We’ll have to see where it goes from there.

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  4. Abhijit Ray

    The house seemed unusual for a state that sees long winter. Now that you moved up the stairs, how did you get inside the room to see the mountains?

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        1. trentpmcd Post author

          Thanks. Ideas are starting to come, so I will most likely keep going. Not sure yet if it will just be a longish short story, a novella or…

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      “And By the way, no mountains in Minnesota” – That’s the point – no mountains and only one sun in the sky ;) I have started to look at it off line and may make a longer story out of these two parts.

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      Perhaps haunted, but perhaps something more – I used the word “suns” twice, that is, plural, as there is more than one sun in the sky, so after going in, he is looking out into a different world. maybe ;)

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      Thanks :) It is a great exercise to distill the essence of story down to 100 words. I’ve expanded several, including turning one into a 17,000 word novel and another into a 12,000 word novella (both in the book “Embers”), but I’ve thought about doing a book with them still in their 100 word form. It would take 500 of them to fill a short 50,000 word book, so I might need to add some longer (250 word) stories in as well…

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      I’m thinking that I’m going to have to change “FF” in FF SF from “Friday Fictioneers” to “Flash Fiction” and fill it in a bit more than I can in 100 word segments. It is possible that the “house” is standing gateway….

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      Maybe aliens. Maybe something totally different ;)Of course I was an impressionable youth when I first saw Luke Skywalker watching the two suns set in the best of the Star Wars movies…

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