
PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll
It was empty, the normal hustle and bustle come to an end. Strainers and sifters hung in their silent testimony of the last meal served. Left as was.
The world was still, the buildings held their breath.
And then a whistle. A dull thud. Dust and plaster fell from the ceiling.
Another thud and the skylight blew out, filling the room with millions of glass shards.
The antiaircraft fire was as useless as a gnat against a bear.
But it didn’t matter.
The people had long left their homes to try to find life in the harsh, cruel world beyond.
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Word count = 100
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Trent,
That’s a heart-rending tale, so vividly told.
Unfortunately there are way too many living this reality.
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Thanks, Natasha. It is so sad that there are so many people living stories similar to this one.
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When faced with the alternative, people tend to choose life. I like ghe way you structured this, leaving your revelation of their apparent safety, for the very end.
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For some, the survival instinct is staying put and trying to burrow deeper. I’m not sure how well that works with modern warfare. But, yeah, I think most people would chose life, even if the prospects as a refugee look dim right now. Thanks.
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Your story reflects the awful events that are going on around us in a powerful way. Well done.
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A few comments said “dystopia” – I wish! A bit too realistic in too many places in the world today. Thanks.
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A story with great description and tension, Trent. I could see it happening. I hope the people found somewhere safe to find refuge. —- Suzanne
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Thanks, Suzanne. I hope they do too, though in today’s world it isn’t easy being a refugee.
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Oh no, dystopian refugee awfulness, a great and poignant piece, Nicely done
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I wouldn’t want to be a refugee, but it beats being in a town that is actively being bombed out of existence… Thanks.
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And so it is, all down through the centuries. The difference today is that there no more worlds on the planet; nowhere to go to get away from those who want to shut you up, control you, or kill you. No escape.
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Agreed, man has always shown his inhumanity and those that are caught between are usually the ones paying the price. Today those that can help usually slam the door in the faces of the unfortunate.
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Good story, Trent. While there’s life, there’s hope. But you’re right – this is the reality for far too many people. I was appalled by the UK government’s recent response to the adverse judgement on selling arms to Saudi Arabia, which boiled down to “Oh dear. We made a mistake.”
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It is the reality for far too many people, and as long as a lot of money is to made by selling arms, it isn’t going to get a lot better.
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It doesn’t sound as if leaving had much better prospects for them, but guess they had no choice. It was either choose to be a refugee surviving on the mercy of others or die in the bombs and crossfire. Tragic reality of our world.
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I would not want to be a refugee in today’s world, that’s for sure. And the world that seems to frown on refugees sure doesn’t seem to want to do anything to stop people from creating more…
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Out of the frying pan and into the fire. So sorry their cosy nest was senselessly destroyed.
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Life as a refugee is never easy, but better than what they could expected staying there…
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Yes, Trent.
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An attempt to demolish a building that has long been vacated?
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It is a war and the town is being bombed. The people all left in a lull in the fighting and are all now refugees, though there are are still some trying to defend the town (i.e., the antiaircraft fire).
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Thank you.
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Will it ever end? Where next? A thought-provoking piece indeed.
Here’s my story.
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I think humans being humans there will never be an end to it….
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Great descriptions. A hard life is beginning, but at least they got out.
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I don’t think it would be fun to be a refugee today, but, yeah, at least they all escaped.
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Dystopian yet hopeful.
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Dystopian if you imagine it being a 1st world country (unless it is WWII), but too close to reality in many places today.
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I hadn’t considered that.
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When I wrote the story I was thinking about some of the current wars and the refugees. Not a pretty picture. But I was also thinking of any and all modern wars, those in the past and future.
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Well described, Trent. A real-life scenario for far too many!
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Thanks, Dale. Far, far too many people around the world…
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Yes.
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Somber and all too true for all too many. Good job, Trent!
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There are too many people that live this reality. Thanks.
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Great story! You’re quite the storyteller.
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Thanks, Maria!
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Fits the prompt well Trent, the futility of war exposed.
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Thanks, Iain. War is usually harshest on those caught in the middle.
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Definitely a well-written tale, such an awful situation.
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Oh, dear… so glad that they got out in time! Well-told tale here… could be part of something larger, I think!
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Thanks. I’ve written a few “war as seen through the eyes of the common people caught in the middle” stories. Some day I may put them together as a single larger whole.
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That would be a good idea… there’s definitely a larger story within. :)
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The antiaircraft fire was as useless as a gnat against a bear! That is my favorite line!! Nicely put together
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Thanks! I wanted this to be about any war in any land, but since planes of a certain country that use the bear as a symbol have been used a lot in some of the world’s hot-spots, well, i thought this made a good analogy.
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You’re welcome!
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Dear Trent,
Somber, cautionary tale. Well told.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks. I think this scenario is playing out in too many places across the world right now…
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I hope they succeeded. Unless they were the enemy of course, in which case I hope they didn’t
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It does seem to be that way, that the common people caught in the crossfire are the enemy while the political bosses that cause the war always come out on top, win or lose…
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Terrible situation, but really well told. Nice work.
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Thanks. A sad reality for too many people in the world.
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