Colors shout out loud
Wind howls across blowing sand
A lonely sunset
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Bright colors
Cold sandblasted beach
Lone sunset
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Loud hues
Blowing sand
Sunset
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This was written for Colleen’s Weekly Poetry Challenge. This week it was free choice of poet. I did a haiku, but did it three times with the three different syllable schemes: 5/7/5, 3/5/3 and 2/3/2.
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Trent, may I use the 3/5/3 version in my book? I give you credit in the bibliography and you retain all the rights to your poetry. Thanks. <3
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With proper credit and everything, yes, I’d be honored to have this included :) Do you have any details yet on the book you are planning? If you’ve posted about it on your blog and I missed it, just point me there :)
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I’m on my phone. Let’s see if this https://colleenchesebro.com/2020/02/01/syllabic-poetry-donations/
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Yep, I somehow missed that post. Sounds like a great idea. As I said, I’d be honored to be included :)
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Thanks, Trent. After each chapter, I’m including examples of the different poetry forms. I so appreciate your help. <3
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Good job with almost three Trent but I’d say the first is my favourite. :)
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Thanks, Marje. I’m a little more sued to the “traditional” 5/7/5 so may still have more of a knack for them :)
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All three are beautiful, Trent.
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Thanks, Diana.
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Well done Trent! I like how your focus shifted in each of these poems, along with how they all retained their elegance and meaning, even with less and less words/syllables. I’ve never thought of that as a concept, your trio works superbly well together :)
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Thanks. This is my first try at doing pretty much the same poem in the three different formats. It was a good exercise. I’m glad you enjoyed this trio :)
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Trent, that photo is spectacular!! I love the evolution of your Haiku forms. It really gives you an appreciation for the meaning and brevity of words. Well done. I can only imagine how cold it must have been in this photo. BRRRRR…
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Thanks, Colleen. It was cold, but mostly WINDY…. I had grit in my eyes and in my mouth for a half of an hour after I left the beach. Still worth it :)
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LOL! It was definitely worth the visit. Great photo!
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I like one and three best. I think if I had to choose just one, it would be the first one. Nice job.
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Actually, this stirs me up to write some more haiku myself. Haven’t written any in a long time. I tend to write a lot of cinquain — my first love in syllable-controlled poetry. But then since I created the Tso’i form last year, I’m trying to write more of that as well. It’s difficult — even though it came from me. Go figure. :) :) :) Anyway, I think I’ll focus on a little haiku later today when I get some thinking time. Thanks for the catalyst.
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I think I do the tankas more than any, but I’ve tried my hand at several other forms. If you want more inspiration, look at Colleen’s weekly challenges.
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Thanks. In ways I like the “traditional” haiku format (number one) the best, but it is fun to try all three ways :)
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Glorious Trent words and photo 💜
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Thanks, Willow! This was one of the most beautiful sunsets I’ve seen, but it was very cold and super window, so I really was the only one on the beach :)
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You were blessed to be there 💜
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Agreed, I was :)
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