Such a long journey
Detritus of life picked up
Reflecting others
The years will add their layers
Our now is formed by our past
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Our now is formed by our past
The years will add their layers
Reflecting others
Detritus of life picked up
Such a long journey
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This was written for Colleen’s Weekly Poetry Challenge. This week was poet’s choice. I chose a tanka. This week, I decided to put a little extra effort into making it read both forward and backwards.
Hi, Trent! Wow! Bravo to you! I love what you did here. It’s difficult to write a poem that can be read both ways. The photo of the shell is great and pairs perfectly with your poem. I love the lines: ‘The years will add their layers’ and ‘Our now is formed by our past’ and then seeing the barnacles all over the shell. Have a great weekend! :D xo
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Thanks, Vashti! I reread Colleen’s description of a tanka and noticed that she said they should be able to be read backwards, so I worked towards that :) I do love that shell, it is very cool. It was great inspiration when writing the poem, having the words mean one thing when the poem is alone, but hinting another direction when looking at the photo.
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“Detritus of a life picked up” — That’s such a fantastic line. Loved the poem!
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Thanks!
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Right words work both ways huh?! ;-) Well done! 👏
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I never knew they were supposed to work both ways in a tanka, so… Something new to remember as I go forward. Thanks!
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Awesome Trent enjoyed the reversal. :)
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Thanks, Marje!
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so clever the way you reversed that – enjoyed slowly reading it
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Thanks, Y. And, as you can see, I put that shell to good use.
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Yes – good thinking
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Very cool, Trent. I love how you crafted them to read both ways.
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Thanks, Diana. I reread Colleen’s description of the different poem types and noticed that she said a good tanka can be read in reverse, so… I’m glad it worked the way I wanted.
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I didn’t know that. I like a challenge!
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Every so often I reread here “cheatsheet” to see if I missed anything, and sure enough, that’s something I hadn’t noticed before: “Remember, great Tanka poem can be read both forward and backward.” Like you, I like a challenge :)
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Great flipping poem (get it, cause you flipped it) sorry…. That shell is a great example it is layered & rough but I love that there is also beautiful colour in it, just like our lives. So cool.
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Glad you liked the flipping poem, and no points off for using a pun in your comment ;) That shell was very cool and I knew I had to use it.
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You used the shell photo! Excellent Tanka, Trent. That shell is like its own little ecosystem. I love when nature inspires our words. <3
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Thanks, Colleen. I often use my photos to give inspiration to the poems I do, particularly if there is no theme or photo given. And, yeah, I love the little ecosystem on this shell…
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Nice to see the shell being put to such good use, Trent.
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Thanks, Robbie. I loved the photo, so also enjoy using it as inspiration :)
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Excellent poem. Extra kudos for making it read backwards!
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Thanks.
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I like how your poem makes sense both forward and backward. Good image as motivation for a poem.
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Thanks. I thought the shell was cool, so am glad I could use it for inspiration.
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What a good job we cannot see the debris we collect as we go through life!
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I’m sure if we could, I’d have more stuff on my back than the shell in the photo ;)
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I know I have already!
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hahah – same here
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lol, I think that goes for all of us.
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Agree
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