Space and Time #darkfibs

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time
space
travel
distant worlds
rocket to the moon
leaving the lonely Earth behind
my world dissolves into vacuum when you are not here

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vast
void
vacuum
infinite
can life be out there
Earth alone in thee universe
is this the one oasis or is it the desert

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This was written for Colleen’s weekly poetry challenge. This week were were to create our own syllabic poetry form. I call mine the “Dark Fib”. It is based on the Fibonacci numbers (sequence), taking the first eight numbers as so: 0, 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8, 13. The “zero” is to be a symbol or punctuation mark that defines the poem. The next six lines should be about math, science (i.e. here it is space) or technology. The last line is 13, unlucky, so should be a dark statement about love, life, etc., that is something more down to Earth, more human. It just needs to be dark. The above is two different poems of the form, but somewhat connected in these.

41 thoughts on “Space and Time #darkfibs”

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      Thanks, Colleen! Glad you liked my new form, and the poems I made with it. With the requirement that it has to have math, science or technology, maybe I should have called it “Dark Nerd” instead of “Dark Fib”. Nah, I think I like the title ;) I looked at that “0” for just a second before that “aha” moment on how I could write zero syllables.

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  7. SelmaMartin

    Your Fibs are gorgeously put together. The adding of punctuations is a creative thing I admired in these poems. Well presented. Impactful. Love them. Thanks for sharing.

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      Thanks, Yvette. With the second, I was thinking that the depressed poet (not me) felt separated from the life around him/her, so the question wasn’t “is there life out there?” but “is there life down here?” (Again, I’m channeling my inner darkness, I am not feeling this way now :) )

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        1. trentpmcd Post author

          I’ve been told that if everyone interpreted a poem the same way, I was doing something wrong ;) lol. Not sure if that is entirely true, but getting the reader involved is to be desired.

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          1. Prior...

            Oh I think I agree with that statement – and a poem that can illicit different ideas and feelings is a gem – and your ongoing writing helps you really hone this craft
            And again – this post was nice in the way the two fit together yet could really stand alone.

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      Thanks. I’m a math nerd, so inventing my own form, I had to do something like his. One issue is that it can get big pretty quick… But limiting the number of liens works.

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